Audience Feedback 1

  We displayed the first draft of our short film to a small audience and they gave use positive feedback (+) and things to improve upon (-)

 

 

+ : Good range of shots

            Effective use of sound

- : Make narrative more clear, perhaps have more speech

              more shots of the antagonist

+: Good use of camera angles such as over the shoulder and establishing/ wide angled shots. 

- : Include some extreme close ups to show the protagonist's facial expressions.

              Have a clearer narrative. Level 3

+ : Suspense built well

            Follows thriller conventions

- : Adjust brightness/contrast in premiere.

              More/clearer dialogue

              Move away from horror themes

+ : Good camera shots

             Good use of lighting effect

- : make narrative more clear

              more dialogue

+ l: Really good camera work and good location used

- : I thought the music didn't relate to what was going on. I was also unsure of the

              genre. Level 3

DRAFT Print Product

Here are some print products. They were various design ideas that we wanted to draft out to see which would look better as the final piece.

Creating an Opening Title

For my project I decided it would be better to make our own title for a production company. For this I used Adobe After Effects and created one from scratch. The software is industry standard, so I wanted to make it as professional as possible. After watching a couple of tutorials on youtube for the software and learning from just playing around with the software I managed to create a functioning opening title. However I also wanted to add sound and fade effects to it, so I imported it to Premier Pro, with the main film footage, and added the sound effects on to it there. However, one problem I had was the first time I imported it the clip came out at a smaller resolution than I wanted so I rendered it again in After Effects and exported it again, and the quality was much better.

DRAFT Retaliation

• the volume of the music is too loud at points
• one of the cuts is delayed and needs to be edited
• lighting when shown on a projector may be an issue
• we have yet to film the ending
• the narrative may not be clear at this point
• sound effects need to be added

We asked some questions about our film and some of them were :

What is the narrative?
Can you notice the colour correction?
How does it fit the thriller genre?
How does the soundtrack create a mood or an atmosphere?
What is the audience for this short film?
Where would you expect to see this short film?
Is the pace of editing suited to the style of the film?
We switched the aspect ratio from 16:9 to 2.39:1 which is common to Thriller films. Do you like    this style?
Is there enough dialogue?
Is the lighting an issue?






Here is also some feedback we gathered from an audience:

November Feedback Response

Your short film has a clear progression of shots and the bars are effective in giving it a cinematic look. Shots are of a good quality and framing and composition are proficient showing excellent technical skill in use of the camera. Audio has been considered and a JVC camera has been used which shows ambition and an ability to use a more advanced camera.

Music is appropriate and builds tension ass does the length of shots. Feedback may indicate that shots are lengthy but this suits the style of the short film.

Music is copyright free as it is sourced from Incomputech so make this clear in your web-log or put it in the credits.

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I don't think you need to overdub sound but maybe add some ambient sounds or effects.

The narrative is clear. Make sure that the story is not cliched.  Be original and think of a twist at the end or defy expectations.  I am intrigued as to how you will resolve the narrative.  this is the key to level 4. 

 My response:
I think that the length of the shot fits well, as we want time to feel drawn out, like how it would feel in the protagonists situation. It is intended that we credit the appropriate sources that we used for our production. We also intend to add ambient sound effects and have plans to leave the narrative with a unique and exciting ending.
 

November feedback

Your short film has a clear progression of shots and the bars are effective in giving it a cinematic look. Shots are of a good quality and framing and composition are proficient showing excellent technical skill in use of the camera. Audio has been considered and a JVC camera has been used which shows ambition and an ability to use a more advanced camera.

Music is appropriate and builds tension ass does the length of shots. Feedback may indicate that shots are lengthy but this suits the style of the short film.

Music is copyright free as it is sourced from Incomputech so make this clear in your web-log or put it in the credits.

Document your creative journey

I don't think you need to overdub sound but maybe add some ambient sounds or effects.

The narrative is clear. Make sure that the story is not cliched.  Be original and think of a twist at the end or defy expectations.  I am intrigued as to how you will resolve the narrative.  this is the key to level 4.

TASK 10 Filming: Day 2

The second day of filming was considerably more successful than the first. We decided to re-shoot what we had done previously, so there are no lighting mix ups from shot to shot. We again used the JVC camera to take our shots, and managed to do them at much better quality then previously.

We filmed at the similar time to the first shoot, however as we were prepared we managed to get through shots a lot better. The main issue was how soon it got dark, however we got a good portion of our filming complete.

For the next session of filming we will have all shots completed.